Tuesday, October 18, 2011

Write on Wednesday: Bring me sunshine in a cup

I'm joining Ink, Paper, Pen for Write on Wednesdays!

Write On Wednesdays Exercise 19 - Sunshine in a cup. Write the words of Emily Dickinson: "Bring me sunshine in a cup" at the top of your page. Set a timer for 5 minutes. Write the first words that come into your head after the prompt. Don't take you pen off the page (or fingers off the keyboard). Stop only when the buzzer rings! Do this exercise over and over if you wish. Write beyond 5 minutes if you like, you can link it up as an extra post.
photo taken by my cousin Rachel

Bring me sunshine in a cup, to linger on lazy afternoons drinking tea in my mother's summer house. We gently rock on wicker chairs, - my mother, sisters and I - the smell of roses hangs heavy in the air and the fat bees drone outside, dusted with pollen.  My fingers are stained with the juice of mulberries, my cheeks flushed with summer heat, the hair curls damply at my neck. I am drowsy and content to listen to idle gossip, tea cup warm in my hand.  Oh, bring me sunshine in a cup for I am far away from home.

17 comments:

  1. Cool exercise! Ahhh there's nothing like a lazy afternoon!!! Love the lay out of your blog.

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  2. What a heady drink of sunshine, beautiful.

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  3. I'm picturing an english afternoon reminiscent of "Emma".
    I think you could break up the first line - but enjoyed it!

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  4. I want to be there, wearing white linen drinking tea from bone china cups.

    A beautiful image and beautiful imagery :)

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  5. I think you're right....it would be better 'Bring me sunshine in a cup, to linger on lazy afternoons in my mother's summer house.' The tea cup reference comes in later anyway. I think I wrote it that way because tea is such a big part of our afternoon ritual :)

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  6. I agree, it has fabulous imagery..makes me want to be outside on this gorgeous day sitting in a rotunda writing my novel..ahhh...
    (PS missed you last night, hope to see you soon) x

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  7. What a great image. I sit in a dreary mountain city dreaming of summer. Oh, to have a summer house, mulberries and flushed cheeks from the heat. Oh, you make me ache for summer! Beautiful.

    I love the layout of your blog too - so chic!

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  8. thanks B! I'm a graphic designer by day so can't help tizzying things up and making them pretty :) just need to work on my .html skills a bit. have got too lazy using Dreamweaver to write my code for me! As far as summer goes, I've been in Melbourne 18 months now and not a day goes by that I don't think about summer in Perth, or sitting around in my mum's garden drinking tea with my sisters *sighhhhhh*

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  9. I loved the story brings back happy memories.I put a little card on my blog for you thank you for your lovely comments my friend and the follow its going to be fun getting to know you more.

    Always Wendy

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  10. Ah, the scent of roses and the hum of bees in summer. You somehow managed to remind me of Ville Valo and Natalia Avelon's Summer wine, the summers I spent as a child at my aunt's summer house and a small collection of beautiful films and books, all in quick succession. Suddenly I long to return there and let time drag by at a more sluggish rate than it does here in the city. Strong, captivating imagery. =)

    / Rain

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  11. This has a lovely atmosphere of times gone by.

    Oh to have a summer house in which to read and while away the afternoon.

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  12. Such a lovely piece. Evocative and heart warming, I want to be part of it!

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  13. What a great piece. I loved the first line in it's original form. It flows and sets up the pace of a summer afternoon - languid, comes to mind. I read the second version and it felt a little stilted to me. But there you go. Loved the images of damp hair, mulberry stains. Can almost hear the flies buzzing!

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  14. I'd love to be a part of this environment! This brings to mind beautiful surroundings of nature and a nice relaxing day. Nice job!

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  15. Beautiful scene, I can see why you would be feeling homesick! I could hear the bees and feel the sticky warmth and almost taste the mulberries! Just divine!

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  16. Plenty of great imagery, it read beautifully and I felt like I was right there with you. The writing suited the photography perfectly. Perhaps you and your sister could team up...A photo on a card with a beautiful stream of consciousness like this would look great on my kitchen wall! I always enjoy your writing, Eloise.

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  17. How Jane Austen! I really love this romantic, whimsical style of writing. Beautiful!

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